Layout: [ 19/25 ]

I found the font a little small on the ol' eyes, but that's forgivable. The design is by rising-sun.diaryland.com and... well... it doesn't do much for me. I'm not a flowers kind of girl, though, so that might have something to do with it. Glad you changed the original pink background because *lordy* was that tough on the peepers. Your diary doesn’t have a title but I assume that is a conscious choice on your part. If you’re in the market for one, may i suggest "Crazy Aunt Jenny's Spice of Life Variety Hour"? No? Okay, fair enough. The added information at the top was kind of neat. I've never seen someone list what they're wearing at the top of every entry. Hmmm... maybe if i did that, all those guys on the chatrooms would stop asking. The navigation is really easy though, even for someone easily confused like me. And that's important. Because I'm not so bright. Long and short of it? Okay, and easy to use but not too much to holler at.

Content: [ 15/60 ]

See, here's the thing. I know how easy it is to slip into the "first i did this, and then OMG!! i did *this!* and then Mr. Blah-blah came over, and then we went to Randomplace! Okay, more later! LOL!!" but man, it ain't the most user-friendly thing to read, know what i'm sayin'? So when I read something like this where i just want to tear my eyes out and then stomp on them, i get dismayed. And then i drink. The redeeming thing? The end of this entry was *good* stuff! I want to see your Barbie movie! Hell, i just want to see her magnetic stomach remove. If your whole entry had been about the Barbie and we'd skipped all the stuff at the beginning i would've been a lot more enthralled. And, it seems, that's a pretty good assessment of most of your diary entries. A good idea or three mixed in with some stuff that is kind of unnecessary. If this diary was written primarily for your friends, great, go for it, way to be. If not... well, sometimes picking one thing you did that day, or noticed, or got angry at, or laughed about is a whole lot easier to read (and way more thought-provoking) than an hour-by-hour breakdown. A shame that your longest entries are usually of the "first i did this..." variety. But don't think you don't need to have an out-of-the-ordinary life to be interesting. I see some promising potential.

Errors: [ 4/5 ]

Didn't notice much except for that loathed 'kewl' and 'ppl' thing. But since i seem to be of a dying breed where those abbreviations are concerned, you're practically perfect, kid. Your guestbook doesn't work, though. And that's kind of irritating.

Contact: [ 2/2 ]

Man, how *can't* I contact you? AIM, email, guestbook (when you get it working), comments...

Bonus: [ 4 ]

Pretty neat. Glossary (nice, never seen this before), links, bio, location/food/mood indicator before every entry.

Word of advice:

The KISS principle works well here. Keep It Short and Simple. While you've pretty much mastered the 'short' part, i'd love to see you just focus on one thing and give me what you think about it, no holds barred. I want to know who you are, not just what you do, and i'm aching for some real window into what makes you *you*. Gimme something to work with! I read about 25 of your entries and while I saw a glimmer of you now and then but i want it to be what drives this diary.

Fave. Quotes:

~If you were covered in Gatorade, in the desert, and were being chased by killer bees.. I would lick the Gatorade off.

-ok, I think I'm growing a second nose or something on the side of my face. From afar, it looks like a harmless pimple.

Best entries:

This entry was a good example of how a short, simple story can still make people entertained and giggly. Me, for example. And this one was pretty decent, too. Lilac my ass. Tee-hee.

Will I be coming back? [ 1/8 ]

I might check in to see if anything's different, but i doubt i'll stay around. Good luck in your future, but i probably won't be around to read about it.

Total: [ 45/100 ]

Reviewed by: Trasker